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Awake
endless motion
energy take
sublime formation
1 or 2
maybe 3 or 4
time to time
never stopping
what to do
nothing to think of
it enrages you
yet nothing to think of
24
yet seemingless infinity
in the dark
insanity
can u slip
fall asleep
close your eyes
fall into your minds guise
stay away
can you really
stay sane
unpossiblity
I do not know really what to say but to start it all with the format... but there is another thing about this... it makes you want to read more... this could last for pages and pages.... in other words REALLY GOOD!!! great job :D:
is it impossibility.
Hmm it sounds nice has a little word play as well, i think u could describe the darkness better. but a awesome poem non the less
hey I really like this poem. Different from alot of the stuff I see here. Don't get me wrong... every piece is original and unique in its own right. But there are only few that really seem to stand out and demand attention.
True true, at least it wasn't a big romancey kissy kissy poem. i think to many love poems sometimes its just nice that u can get to read some pure anguish.
ah... ya see the poem is not about darkness nor anguish but the insanity that you get from being trapped in a dark area for 24 hours u just sit there and nothing happensQuote:
Originally Posted by jaderabbit