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    2nd poem

    When I think of you, I cry tears of blood
    The pain you left with me
    Builds up until I'm ready to explode
    Then I know how much better my life is without you

    You may think that without you I am nothing
    But the truth is that without me you are nothing

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    Re: 2nd poem

    int get it much but keep it up..



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: 2nd poem

    I think you should look at a different writing perspective. Instead of writing with an "I" voice, write with something a little more different. Make the character distant from youself? Or perhaps keep the character as yourself, just change the way you present.
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