Thread: The 3 boys

Aww... Ray! *hugs* such a nice, wonderfull poem!!! A really, really nice work, with descriptions and everything... wonderful- it's like putting all your best dreams and favourite spots in one peom- great!!! ^^ *sniff* It made me cry ^^

Really, really nice work!!!! ^^ I can't even say "Can't wait to see more." because this is about as much as someone could do, this is about... perfection ^^

Great work!!! ^^ I love it sooo much!

ehehe ty ^^ *hugs back* glad you enjoyed it ^^ i did my best in less than 30minutes

Really, really nice work!!!! ^^ I can't even say "Can't wait to see more." because this is about as much as someone could do, this is about... perfection ^^

now now.. im not that good.. ^^ but thank you very much

That was nice poem and I like it because when I read like a story about three boys ...
and the most sentence I love it ..This it such as a dvice ..

Their mom even once told them to look for someone more down to earth.
I find it funny that they are all none other than me...

By the way Nice work ...^^

^^ thank you...

Yup.. that advise meant as dont try to get someone who you think you'll never get...and i used that someone by referring to Angel...

but love is strong... the boys wont let their dream go away just like that... even they have to get themselves out of this world...

Originally Posted by RayMe

The 3 Boys

A boy looks outside from his window,
It was raining continuously for hours.
He hates looking at the black clouds,
but he found that the rainbow after rain is beautiful.

"The "pain" was worth it," He thought to himself.
At least he could gaze upon the seven colours of light.
It made him smile but only for a while,
because soon after the sky cries again...

....

Another boy sits down by the beach,
on a big rock, he watches the horizon.
His heart is filled with envy.
Watching the happy couples went by made him grit his teeths.

He can only look into his empty arms,
then wind blows gently to his face.
It soothes him and makes him calmer,
but sadly the sight of his "loneliness" made roar like the violent waves.

....

Then there's this another boy.
Silently sighing under a shady tree.
The green landscape filled with colourful flowers,
where a small canal flows down to an old cottage.

He is smiling to him self,
enjoying the fresh air and scenary.
Then he looked down and frown.
He wishes so much that he can enjoy this with someone...

...

Silly things about this three boys.
They all fell in love with an Angel.
Their mom even once told them to look for someone more down to earth.
I find it funny that they are all none other than me...

Hmmm what chu guys think?

great job man keep it up well done its great

^^ sure will do whats funny man?

I'll do my best.. ^^ thx

The last stanza needs a little tweaking . . . The grammar isn't right and I think you can express it better. (By the way, "Horizone" isn't a word. There's no e at the end.)

Other than that, a fantastic poem. I'm pretty sure I'm one of them . . . maybe Boy #3? Yeah . . . Good work, mate.