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    I am impressed! ^_^

    This is a good piece of writing right here. I love how descriptive and well thought out your writing is in this! I also like how you used three different characters in different situations, yet they all have something in common.

    Well done!!


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    wondefull poem Ray^^you have done some grammar mistakes but you had a good description.
    all i have to say is...keep up the great job bro*hugs you*

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    This poem is well written. I enjoy reading it. There's a lot of imagery and emotion. Keep up the awesome work. ^_^

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    Wow! this a superb poem that you made Rayme. The wording and all, left me in awe. *bows*. Honestly, I am captivated with the imagery that you presented. This poem really says it all. I loved the idea of pain, envy, loneliness... because many of us readers can relate to that.

    teeths... should be teeth (teeth is the plural form of tooth).

    Keep up the Superb Poem Masterpiece job, Rayme. ^^

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: The 3 boys

    T.T grammar mistakes... *kicks the tables in the room and the chair* gahhh~!!!
    thx for pointing them out ^^ Raja and tenchu san

    Well yea... the last stanza is crap... -.- the original sentence was way too long... :/ kept on changing and got this crap...and the school bell ring.. xD so i just went home and re-type without looking at the grammar mistakes and stuffs... -.- sheesh grr....

    Thx araekendra... glad you liked it ^^

    and thank you Tifa... im glad you liked it ^^

    and raja... thats too much to say for my humble poem... ty ^^

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