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    !4 and grown to hate

    14 and damn near grown
    But can’t stand the fact of being alone
    An empty heart, an empty home
    But I’m still 14 and damn near grown

    18 and out she said to me
    My sorrow she could not see
    In side I was begging and pleading
    But I said 4 more years I’m 14

    I love her, doubt she feels the same
    Since I was born I was trapped in her game
    My sorrow to whom I blame?
    I blame her, she's to blame!

    I wish time would halt! Halt to a stop
    Her trust in me has totally dropped
    To the point I can’t walk around the block
    But I’ll love her, a love that'll never stop

    4 more years and I’ll be out
    Kind of funny the way I acted proud
    But on the fateful day I’ll be out
    I'll plead my sanity out

    "MOM I LOVE YOU I REALLY DO
    I'M SOORY FOR THE WAY I'VE ACTED TOWARDS YOU
    BUT YOU KNOW I'VE NEVER BEEN THE ONE TO ACTED OUT
    BUT KNOW UR READY TO PUT ME OUT
    YOU TREAT ME LIKE I'M 3 AGAIN
    3 TO 18 THIS MAKES NO SENSE MAN
    I PUT MY AFFERTS TOTTALLY IVAIN
    YOU’RE THE ONE TO MAKE ME GO INSAIN
    YOU NEVER ASK ME WHY I CRY
    FOR THAT I WISHED TO DIE
    I WONDER WHAT WOULD HAVE IF I WAS NEVER BORN
    YEA! A THOUGHT SO SCORN
    I HATE YOU, YET I LOVE YOU
    YOU KNOW I'M UR BABY GIRL BUT WHY DO YOU TREAT ME THE WAY YOU DO"

    I'm 14 and damn near grown
    She set me up to be alone
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    I'm a solider of Pen and Paper!
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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    i love the poem and allot of kids feel this way towards a mom or dad
    and its sad that they don't bother to ask why there kid is crying or sad
    its why so many kids do stupid things ,to get attention just so
    there parents will notice them, and thats pretty sad but this poem
    point it out so well very awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    a very good poet, Shippo101.
    immpresive.
    but,.... i do not know why u use such a big font size....
    i think 16 or 18 is better that that big font.. (^_^)
    i think it would be better (for me) to read your poem.
    by the way.. it is a sad poem... *uhh..*

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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    this poem is rather nice the only thing I see wrong with it (and this is a personal thing) is that the letters are big and pink

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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    this poem truly depicts how most kid feel toward there parents! And you did a really good job on this one! The only thing I saw from a critic stand point was you had it divided into stanzas but then then just got longer! Even still it was excellent because the pain and the emotion just brought the poem to life! great job!!!

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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    Ugh.. Font color and size was a bad choice. AND I'm not even getting on the spelling..
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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    i love this post. i lke it because it sound like how i feel about my mom. if i could say this to my mom it would be so sweet! :thumbsup:
    poohs my boo

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    Re: !4 and grown to hate

    Great Poem Shippo Letters Toooooooooo Bad.......................
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