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Reply With Quote...........Wow! That was such an awesome poem ZytaI liked it alot.I just loved how you wrote about your time comeing 2 an end.Awesome job.
a freshj poem with no editing or anything done to it....pure, unlike my soul
Tick-tock tick-tock
Time flows by like a river
Smoothly sailing onward
On the surface of my body.
Constantly itching and pestering
The blood in my veins
Carries the bomb of my soul
Tick-tock tick-tock
My life is forever suspended in time
Awaiting the moment of praise
Have you ever wondered why…
In a dream you can touch a fallen sky?
It is always cold, shivering with death
That has gathered through all the millennia.
Tick-tock tick-tock
My time is up
I feel it in my bones
I feel it in my thoughts
With the last of my energy I seek the clock.
9:18 The last I see, tick-tock tick-tock
...........Wow! That was such an awesome poem Zyta
Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^
I would have liked it better without the tick tock. You could have said some thing like
"the clock's antagonizingly breathes out resonance"
or
" Time's hand breaks thought"
Or something not in complete direction of tick tock!
But other than that...it was awesome!
I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.
YAY!!!! GOOD JOB!!! BE PROUD!!! YOU ARE EXPRESSING YOUR FEELINGS IN THE BEST WAY!!!! lets be emo...
there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...
wow that was good one loll
...it was about me going to sleep, not dying >.>
nice poem there, i like the tick tock intro.
I have to disagree. I like how she used an onomatopoeia.Originally Posted by Nympho
Though, the wording seems iffy in the poem. I'm not really sure, but something doesnt feel wuite right with the poem.
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