^^

When you walk away~

Everyday as you turn your face away,
and walks further from me.

Every seconds are tormenting...
Every minutes are suffocating...
The hours are piercing...
The days are like hell...

Even so it sounds burdenful,
i will carry this on my back.
Just knowing i will see you again.
My strenght doubles.

It helps me in many ways.
To endure this and to look ahead,
on the days to come.
Another day when you will say hi again.
^^

Awww, wow I love this Ray! A most excellent poem I have read yet! Definatly hope to see more! :D:

eek...exellent? @.@ well ty ^^ but naw.. it's not :p

Of coarse it is! Wether you like it or not I'm giving you a five for this because it IS excellent!

eek...thats so kind of u ^^ but an excellent over this poem is too much...it's rather too simple and the theme is too well...uhhmm..general...sheesh ^^

So? It's waaaaaaaaaaaay WAY better than my stupid "Just A Dream" one and it's an exelent poem DEAL WITH IT!

I love it ...It's such as sad poem mabye ...
In this poem you chang your style in writing poem but that was very great poem ....:2thumbs:

yup ^^ i did :) hmm.. kinda hard changing my style u know :p ty for the comment ^^