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    Above the Love

    There's a love that we seek
    that we'd like to meet
    someone really sweet
    a love that has cute feet

    I love a personwith the eyes of an ANGEL
    with curly hair and tangles
    the person to mingle and mangle

    above the love
    there's a dove
    flying over us
    but we might
    not ever see
    the who we
    want to love

    isnt that just sad
    does it make you
    really mad
    does it hurt really bad
    for the love you never had

    Above all the love
    we will never find
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    Re: Above the Love

    okay (i despise rhyming poems, just FYI)

    not bad, some mistakes here and there. way more description is needed though, seriously i left me wanting for more when there was nothing. dont think too hard when you write, it becomes crap then if you do. poems are about emotions, it is basic, let them rule the poem.

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    Re: Above the Love

    ok...thanks alot for the tips i despise them to it's just so much easier,and at least they make sense.
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    Re: Above the Love

    i love your poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    Re: Above the Love

    I agree with tupac very very good poem


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    Re: Above the Love

    Its short but I LIKE IT!!!
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