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    Absence pain

    Your absence killing me
    Every things around me remembering me you
    With your face, with your hands, with your voice
    With that space that you left it when you gone
    With the deep sadness that I feel it after you
    After you,
    I didn’t feel sad at anyone
    Losing you make me forget any taste to any sad or pain
    After you all the colors are black
    All the days are same
    All the streets are empty
    A lot of questions in my head, but with out ant answers
    And I am like these questions
    A question with out answer
    A sad with out limit
    A life with out hope
    A human without soul
    A sea without shore
    A passenger without address

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    Re: Absence pain

    I love the abecedarian like tone of the last five lines.

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    Re: Absence pain

    Sis.. you need to work on your grammar still ^^

    First of all... the descriptions are nice ^^ I could picture the emptiness you felt.. well I too feel the same thing.. lol ^^ *sigh* well.. other than that.. it was nice ^^ keep it up sis!

    Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!!
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