Thread: The addict

When reading this I suddlenly had a crazy idea- to change a text from my story into a little poem ^^ Here is what came out. How do you like Ray, you are the master of death in my thoughts, so... how is this:
Her blood
Soaking the floor...
Her chest
Moving up and down fast
As she tries to gasp
Her last breath trough the pain...
Her eyes
Turning red from the tears....
And her hand
Held tightly by the hand of a demon.

I like this poem, though you have better. This poem exlains why you wrote those poems about death- missing something is what makes us feel like dying... love...

A nice, dark poem... Thank you for it ^^

love this poem as it's dark, knew you were better at dark poems

Huh what this *dark poem* but i will call it *crazy poem*....
wow that was very good working in this one ..I love it ...ummm what i say ?
great ...but you did not make a color ...huh ..opps

Hm... not bad lasura u need to watch some more gorish movies.. ^^ like elfen lied and stuff.. look at how they struggle.. ^^ and then...exxagerate it a little..

You sure love dark poems do you my friend? ^^

colour? hmmm would red be good?

i like it its sad and emotional i love it keep it up♥da princess hope to see more

^^ lol.. wakarimasta hime sama (i understand princess... ) xD

^^ Hmm.. thx

very cool poem i liked how you made it
to where there was someone there for them
because in the end when you feel your self
being addicted to anything somoen being there even if its
at the last minute is an aweosme thing , though no one really
understand you or why you did it but as long as they are
there for you in that time of need its really cool.

this was my take on the poem and i like the theme as well
lol sort of did a theme like this but didnt realise it till i read this
just now but this poem is great.