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    The addict

    The Addict

    He is gasping.
    Desparately.
    He is not choked,
    or strangled.

    Tossing his body to the walls.
    Doing everything he could.
    So he could breath.
    Sweating till the floors got wet.

    Struggles on and on for hours,
    but he don't need air.
    He is actually thirsty.
    For the most expensive drink.

    Bangs his head to the walls.
    Bloody and exhausted.
    He stops and gives up.
    Drops his body and lies down.

    Like a corpse he remained.
    Until someone came.
    Out from nowhere and right in time.
    Drips down a drop of it.

    Since that day...
    They both shared it.
    It was little at first.
    Now it is bigger than the seven seas.

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    Re: The addict

    When reading this I suddlenly had a crazy idea- to change a text from my story into a little poem ^^ Here is what came out. How do you like Ray, you are the master of death in my thoughts, so... how is this:
    Her blood
    Soaking the floor...
    Her chest
    Moving up and down fast
    As she tries to gasp
    Her last breath trough the pain...
    Her eyes
    Turning red from the tears....
    And her hand
    Held tightly by the hand of a demon.

    I like this poem, though you have better. This poem exlains why you wrote those poems about death- missing something is what makes us feel like dying... love...

    A nice, dark poem... Thank you for it ^^
    Last edited by Lasura; Jun 14, 2007 at 01:51 PM.

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    Re: The addict

    love this poem as it's dark, knew you were better at dark poems



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    Re: The addict

    Huh what this *dark poem* but i will call it *crazy poem*....
    wow that was very good working in this one ..I love it ...ummm what i say ?
    great ...but you did not make a color ...huh ..opps

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    Re: The addict

    Hm... not bad lasura u need to watch some more gorish movies.. ^^ like elfen lied and stuff.. look at how they struggle.. ^^ and then...exxagerate it a little..

    You sure love dark poems do you my friend? ^^

    colour? hmmm would red be good?

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    Re: The addict

    i like it its sad and emotional i love it keep it up♥da princess hope to see more
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    Re: The addict

    ^^ lol.. wakarimasta hime sama (i understand princess... ) xD

    ^^ Hmm.. thx

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    Re: The addict

    very cool poem i liked how you made it
    to where there was someone there for them
    because in the end when you feel your self
    being addicted to anything somoen being there even if its
    at the last minute is an aweosme thing , though no one really
    understand you or why you did it but as long as they are
    there for you in that time of need its really cool.

    this was my take on the poem and i like the theme as well
    lol sort of did a theme like this but didnt realise it till i read this
    just now but this poem is great.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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