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    Adrift

    Cast off, set sail
    and just ride the waves.

    Nobody ever just goes
    with the flow these days.

    Let your mind be free
    and fly with the wind.

    There's no need to be
    wondering where to begin.

    If you hate to be alone
    then bring a few friends.

    Then you don't have to
    struggle all the way to the end.

    Now face toward the sea,
    let your thoughts shift.

    Let the boat guide itself
    and your mind be adrift.


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    Re: Adrift

    I really like how the flow of the poem goes along with what your saying. I think this is well written despite being slightly repetitive. (Imo)

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Adrift

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    I really like how the flow of the poem goes along with what your saying. I think this is well written despite being slightly repetitive. (Imo)
    Yeah, I tried to fix the repitition, but failed miserably. I'm still happy with this poem though. I haven't written much lately and I'm still trying to over come my writer's block--concerning my fanfic--so I'm quite proud of this one and 'Numbers'.


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    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Yeah, I tried to fix the repitition, but failed miserably. I'm still happy with this poem though. I haven't written much lately and I'm still trying to over come my writer's block--concerning my fanfic--so I'm quite proud of this one and 'Numbers'.
    Well I'm proud of all your writing and I don't think fanfic writers block should stop you from writing other things.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Adrift

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    Well I'm proud of all your writing and I don't think fanfic writers block should stop you from writing other things.
    It usually does though. Just like when I draw one thing and get blocked, I can't draw anything else for the rest of the day until I unblock myself on my original project. My mind is difficult like that. If I could change it, I would. Then writer's/artist's block wouldn't be any problem for me. LOL.


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