Adrift

*atomik_sprout* · Feb 15, 2008, 08:51 AM

Cast off, set sail
and just ride the waves.

Nobody ever just goes
with the flow these days.

Let your mind be free
and fly with the wind.

There's no need to be
wondering where to begin.

If you hate to be alone
then bring a few friends.

Then you don't have to
struggle all the way to the end.

Now face toward the sea,
let your thoughts shift.

Let the boat guide itself
and your mind be adrift.

bratling · Feb 15, 2008, 10:26 AM

I really like how the flow of the poem goes along with what your saying. I think this is well written despite being slightly repetitive. (Imo)

*atomik_sprout* · Feb 15, 2008, 01:11 PM

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Originally Posted by bratling

I really like how the flow of the poem goes along with what your saying. I think this is well written despite being slightly repetitive. (Imo)

Yeah, I tried to fix the repitition, but failed miserably. I'm still happy with this poem though. I haven't written much lately and I'm still trying to over come my writer's block--concerning my fanfic--so I'm quite proud of this one and 'Numbers'.

bratling · Feb 15, 2008, 02:19 PM

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Originally Posted by atomik_sprout

Yeah, I tried to fix the repitition, but failed miserably. I'm still happy with this poem though. I haven't written much lately and I'm still trying to over come my writer's block--concerning my fanfic--so I'm quite proud of this one and 'Numbers'.

Well I'm proud of all your writing and I don't think fanfic writers block should stop you from writing other things.

*atomik_sprout* · Feb 18, 2008, 11:55 AM

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Originally Posted by bratling

Well I'm proud of all your writing and I don't think fanfic writers block should stop you from writing other things.

It usually does though. Just like when I draw one thing and get blocked, I can't draw anything else for the rest of the day until I unblock myself on my original project. My mind is difficult like that. If I could change it, I would. Then writer's/artist's block wouldn't be any problem for me. LOL.

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bratling Devoted Otaku Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota. Posts: 509 Thanks: 0 Thanked 16 Times in 15 Posts Credits: 11,816	Re: Adrift I really like how the flow of the poem goes along with what your saying. I think this is well written despite being slightly repetitive. (Imo) __________________ She's always trying not to cry. But I can see the demons in her eyes. She's always trying not to yell. But you see to her, she's trapped in hell.
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