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    Unhappy After the bombs stop falling

    I hate to do it,
    but i have no choice.

    The only thing I can do now
    is let go. I tried so hard and
    waited for so long. I'm sorry I'm
    not worthy of your trust.

    I wish this all was a dream,
    but it's really a living nightmare.

    All we can do now is just watch
    eachother and love from afar.
    All we can do now is be supportive
    of eachother's decisions...

    I loathe change,
    but must learn to deal with it.

    Just know that if I can fix what's
    broken, if I can regain what's lost;
    I will drop what I have on my plate
    for something sweeter...

    Especially if you say that I can...

    Don't look at this as goodbye,
    look at it as, "See you after the
    bombs stop falling..."


    I love you.


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    Re: After the bombs stop falling

    Dang........you seriously have the talent to project very deep emotions unto a piece of paper!!!!
    I think that this is one of my favorite of all of your poems!!!!!
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    ....wow...that's...just sad...it touched me...

    I liked how you made the poem sound...with emotion and...I sort of felt regret in it...

    I'm wondering...how long does a poem take you to write? lol

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    Re: After the bombs stop falling

    @.@ i could actually feel the vibrating from the bombs of tears falling ... nicely done...

    Love during the war....sheesh...truly is a sad thing..*sighs* being far away is hard (i know how it feels)... but during the war it must be harder...

    nicely done...love the way the feelings are projected like astaroth said ^^

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    Re: After the bombs stop falling

    Master, Master...
    this is by far the best poem that you have written.
    and I have read most of the ones here on the site,
    although I haven't commented on them.
    but like I say this is the best of the best from you.....
    I like the way that the true emotions that were felt,
    were the one's that were highlighted...
    that is my opinion anyway.

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    Re: After the bombs stop falling

    This is really powerful. Very well written and it flows perfectly. You did a fantastic job with this poem and the message it conveys is beautiful. Well to me anyways. What an interesting way to look at things. Maybe we'd be in a better place right now if you'd seen it this way since the start?

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: After the bombs stop falling

    Holy!... I didn't expect to get many comments on this one! LOL. Thanks to all of you for your comments and support! I greatly appreciate it! This poem is pretty unique in a sense that I haven't really written anything like this before. The other poems that touch the same subject are special to me too, but this one I believe it my fav so far.

    Once again, thanks! ^_^


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    Re: After the bombs stop falling

    Well it's very worth being proud of. Your a fantastic writer and this just displays that so well. I kinda feel like it goes really well with my fork in the road one. But I make really odd connections in my mind.

    When i was a teenager and writing poetry. I did it all in AOL mail and formatted and colored and backgrounded it all. So that the LOOK of it had as much to do with the message as the words did. That's what this reminded me of. I'm really fond of the use of color for emphisis. Because colors add such different meaning to things then words can.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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