Well I loved it! It has good describing and emotions! I loved it good job chomo!^^
From the bitter
After taste of your kiss
It used to be so sweet
And always seemed to be in reach
But ever since that day
When we started to drift
The day when you stoped caring
and i stoped believeing
All that i can taste
Is the bitterness
From the last time we kissed
Its not very good i know.Its just of the top of my head.
Funny, I seem to suffer from a simular after taste. Its as if we were drinking different sodas of the same brand.
... Not Ever Again...
Thx you all.And fujesal i try not to have a rythem b/c sometimes it messes with the poem's meaning.Or makes it seem less serious.
And yes.Chomo is my nickname.
oooooooooooooo nice trick
I'll try to remember that =P
maybe you can give me a little more examples of your trick by writing more =D
"act the way you want to be and soon you'll be the way you act"
The lack of rhythm in this poem was definitely unique.
But the meaning really stood out more without the rhythm.
Nice job negi!
Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!