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    The Agreement

    Ok, this time I tried out to writte a lot more freely... no rythm at all just words... let's see how this goes...


    You really do love me.... ?

    Then I’ll trust you with all my heart
    Then I’ll be yours and no one elses'
    But be aware never to break my heart
    For no one has ever forgived himself for that
    And, if you’re not a heartless monster, you won’t also
    But if you are…
    God will know what to do with you better than me…

    I’m still always waiting for love
    And I’m always still waiting for my heart to be broken
    Hurt me, leave me, break my heart and abandon me to bleed
    I will enjoy every single moment of it…

    Yes, the answer is yes… I’ll be yours
    Last edited by Lasura; May 11, 2007 at 05:40 PM.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: The Agreement

    I like this one because it comes from the heart. Also I like how you tried to write with no rhyme, no rythym, just feeling.

    To write with no structure--rhyme/rhythm--tha's an accomplishment; to me anyway. ^_^ Good job.


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    Re: The Agreement

    O>o It's scary to be honest, not a love poem, especially that last two lines of the last paragraph.

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    Re: The Agreement

    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    I like this one because it comes from the heart. Also I like how you tried to write with no rhyme, no rythym, just feeling.

    To write with no structure--rhyme/rhythm--tha's an accomplishment; to me anyway. ^_^ Good job.
    Thank You sprout, your acknowledgment means a lot to me for I love some of your poems... I guess it came out well... writting with no rhythm... That was the thing I wanted to find out... if I can something with no specific rhythm that would be liked.

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip View Post
    O>o It's scary to be honest, not a love poem, especially that last two lines of the last paragraph.
    Love can be different... Love can hurt more than anything else in this world... that's why this poem came out as scary as it is... just when you agree to love, you must understand that it might bring you a lot of pain and misery... Agreeing to be someones boy/girlfriend you agree to possible tortue...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: The Agreement

    Writing from the heart expresses a person's true feelings.That is what i read and not of my own words.It is amazing how frightning and powerful love is in this world.Clearly it is something that is not to be underestimated.But then again we tend to at times.Anyway before i lose myself..i must say that the poem is enjoyable to read because the feelings is something that i can relate to somehow.

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    Re: The Agreement

    Thats such a amazing poem!!!!!!! It comes from your heart thats all it matters! I hope to see more in the future!
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