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    all alone

    i stand right here
    no nead for a phone
    because since two years ago
    im always all alone

    guns where shooting
    bombs where flying
    people were running
    and people were crying

    as they all stand
    they are very scared
    but alll i do is
    stand right there

    because i dont care
    whether i live or die
    because when i wake
    up immediantly i sigh

    so now im alone and
    im not afraid no more
    to let out all of
    the pain and sorrow i stored

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    Re: all alone

    The first stranza was great!!! The 2nd and the 3rd.... I don't understand what you mean with those actually, but it's all good afterwards again... That's ehat I can say, I'd say thid poem was great if not those two stranzas... they didn't seem to fit in...

    Still this is a nice work, I love what you're telling here... the lonely aura is well created, I really enjoyed reading this...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: all alone

    Great poem is it about love, or is it about a loss or is it just simply about lonelyness? but very good poem keep it up

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    Re: all alone

    thank you lasura as always and thank you minidev and its not about love its about lonliness and the greatness of bloodshed and i helped u understand how it is to be only one in my mind

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    Re: all alone

    Very nice! I'm wondering why you're writing about killing people though. Makes me kinda worried. But other than that, you've done a very nice job! ^_^


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