Thread: All Apologies

Interesting..... Not bad. There're some mistakes, but it can still be help. I enjoy it. Don't worry, everybody makes mistakes, there's nothing to be embarrased of.

thanks and i hope todo a poem one day with out mistakes
but as long as peoplelike the poems i do i will post them

I really loved it.It made me cry.you misspelled a word or two,but other than that it was very good.

I liked this.. and I've a few comments too..

Well.. first.. the easy one..

How i wish i could be happy
but it seems it will never
come , i smile so slightly
hoping dawn will break this
darkness but it want.

In this stanza the word "want" is out of place. Perhaps a typo or grammatical mistake... should be "won't" if I'm guessing correctly.

Second. I noticed in some of your lines, the flow breaks, which you should better illustrate by using commas, you've shown that you understand the concept throughout some of the poem.. but you should take time to pick out such details..

Other than that.. if flowed very nicely.. and had an interesting concept.. I liked it, and by the way, punctuations aren't of big consequence in my book, but it is a way to improve the imagery and flow that you intend.

ok i see what you mean and it was a grammical erroe i wasnt sure wich one to use with won't but i do now thanks . and i have problems with punctuation
i sort of really got the hang of it when i was in school but i try to put them when
i think they need it. and thanks again for that tip

No problem man.. just passing on the knowledge I've once been taught myself ^.^

cool knowledge is pwer thats for sure