Thread: All is gone...

I this one alot. It's deep... Makes one think. "Hmm..."

What an amazing awesome deep poem!!! Your an amazing writer! I hope to see more.

Thank You Sprout, Kuwi and Chi! I'm glad You all liked it and felt like it's deep... If it made You think than it must be quite Ok.

But what do you think about the ending, the last stranza? I read it again and understood that I just hate it... What do You think? I think it breakes the rythm and makes no sence at all...

oh wow ..i love it ..it's very deep and i feelit's very sad one you writed
but is very nice...
keep up ..

It's a great poem, but are you trying to go for a rhyming scheme? If so, it didn't flow too well with me. The last stanza? It sounds as though you fell in love with someone, they ripped open your chest, tore your heart out and left you to die. That is what I get from the last stanza.

Great poem, keep up the great work.

Originally Posted by The White Wolf

It's a great poem, but are you trying to go for a rhyming scheme? If so, it didn't flow too well with me. The last stanza? It sounds as though you fell in love with someone, they ripped open your chest, tore your heart out and left you to die. That is what I get from the last stanza.

Great poem, keep up the great work.

Thank You White Wolf for the expansive valuation of my poem... Yeah... it gets out of rythm in some places and yes, that is what I tried to say in the last stranza, verry nice to hear that can be understood.

Thank You again!

it was a good poem...although i used to write them all the time...i can never seem to get a poem going....it always turns into a damn song...i dont know...its weird. >.<