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    Alone in the Dark

    Staring out of my window
    What do I see?
    An intense darkness
    That used to be filled with you and me

    At one time
    That area filled me with hope
    Because I knew your love wasn't far away
    Now the distance is sickening
    And I don't know what to do

    I want so badly to feel your heart beat against my own
    Feel the warmth of your breath on my skin
    The kisses so tender and sweet

    I only feel bitterness where the warmth once resided
    Tears where the kisses once were
    There is no one to save from my loneliness
    From this darkness in my heart

    Strength is what I need
    But alas I can't find it
    I'm alone and so very lonely
    Will nothing penetrate this darkness

    Then suddenly something broke through the darkness
    Something I thought was long forgotten
    What I thought I'd never feel again

    A soft brush to my cheek
    Kisses filling the void
    Bringing life to my lost soul

    Nothing in the world compares to you
    When it comes to this
    How you can make the darkness disperse
    So that only light and peace remain

    Thank you for saving me
    From the darkness
    And in escence
    From myself and everything else that you know
    Would harm me


    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Wow this reminds me so much of me. It's what i'm going through now. But very nice i loved it hope to see more! ^^



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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Ahh... what a wonderfull poem... It's just the poem I could fall inlove with... dark but full of love and weird light at the same time... very nice... very lovely... Love is just so perfectly described here... this poem made me really calm and dreamy... thank you for that...

    I really enjoyed reading this poem!!!!!!!!!

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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    I appreciate your writing EvesElocin, it showed me what I try everytime to accomplish. Though it seems to waver between a happy emotion and a sad one. Mine usually clearly show a normal state, a turbulent state and then a definate state, even if it's unstable as a conclusion. It may not rhyme, but I heard it's not necessary to rhyme in today's trend in writing poetry and I myself rarely rhyme.

    I just finished watching "The Melancholy of Suzumiya Haruhi" for the 2nd time in a year and felt like further exploring your writing in a random manner which came to me as follows:

    Note: I wrote what is under this sentence before what I wrote the above.

    Time flows, rare occasions occur randomly in our lives, yet our mood determines the outcome.

    Why does time flow?

    We exist and move about, we think, we desire and so many other things come to mind. What does it have to do with love and desperation? These are moments that are important to us. It's when we need something to happen or else all falls to pieces.


    Why do exceptions exist?

    To make things more interesting? No. They just happen. On their own? Nope, you have to do something for something to happen. Anything can do, even nothing can do something. The universe isn't immobile, it's ever changing and until it's no more, change will take place. If you do something extreme, it's quite common nowadays and always has been, it's the exception in an exaggeration that brings something new. We've seen so many things, yet normal actions can be seen as exceptional in certain cases, thus rare occasions occur randomly.

    Why does the mood determine the outcome?

    It just does. Well, actually, no. It simply demonstrates your current emotions, sometimes hidden behind a mask willingly or unwillingly created to protect yourself from things happening around you. It's a shell that once broken, you have no choice to react. Surprise someone and you might not be able to break this shell. Everyone is unique, each shell resonates differently.




    What does this all culminate to?

    LOVE
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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Wow that was really inspiring. Thank you so much. You just made me want to do even more. Thank you for the encouragement.

    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    hey Neves I have a really good Idea on how you are feeling right now and today because I am feeling the same way.
    Verry good poem keep it up k?
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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    AThat is a really really good poem i like it alot it reminds me of alot of things u did a good job in writing it

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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    oncour oncor lol i liked i i hope u keep on writing more and keep posting new ones lol friends

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