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    Alone in the Dark

    Darkness is all I see.
    How did this come to be?

    My life has taken a turn for the worst.
    I would've been just fine if I didn't hurt.

    My heart is broken, my soul shattered.
    It seems every year, my life follows a pattern.

    My light has faded, or rather moved on
    to someone who can see that he did me wrong.

    The darkness takes over and the pain sets in.
    A man who used to be happy now regrets his sins.

    Alone in the dark, I sit and I cry.
    For, I no longer feel as if I am alive.

    Alone in the dark without a flashlight.
    The sun cannot penitrate through this eternal night.


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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Wow that was deep although you may want to make it ryme constantly though with this particular one it seems to go with the title, seems to show breaking and also it shows there are inconsitencies within life.
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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    This is one sad poem...........I really hope that it is not about you.......
    But the rhythm is amazing and so are the words.....
    Over all......nicely done!!!
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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Thanks you two! I appreciate your taking the time to read this! I spent all day today deciding whether or not I should post this one. I'm kinda glad I did. I'm glad you guys like it. I hope you like my future writing as well.


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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    that really penitrated through my soul it was amazing keep it up.

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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Quote Originally Posted by INUYASHA View Post
    that really penitrated through my soul it was amazing keep it up.
    Yo, thanks for your comment! I'm glad you liked my poem and I hope you like my future works as well! WELCOME TO ANIMEONLINE!!


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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Alone in the dark without a flashlight.
    The sun cannot penitrate through this eternal night
    flashlight.. kinda modern

    *clears throat* sorry about that.. Hmm... this is a nice read... It was written nicely... ^^ a deep poem too.. hmm...very simple and easily understandable... you kept repeating that you are in somewhere dark.. or captured in darkness... makes the poem gloomier.. added some effect there nicely...

    It's an interesting read.. nicely done ^^ keep it up...

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    Re: Alone in the Dark

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post


    flashlight.. kinda modern

    *clears throat* sorry about that.. Hmm... this is a nice read... It was written nicely... ^^ a deep poem too.. hmm...very simple and easily understandable... you kept repeating that you are in somewhere dark.. or captured in darkness... makes the poem gloomier.. added some effect there nicely...

    It's an interesting read.. nicely done ^^ keep it up...
    Gloom is what I was goin' for, my friend. I dunno, lately that's all I can write about. I hope I get out of this slump soon because, I'm so tired. The negative words I write take energy and so does the depression. So, hopefully things'll turn around and I'll be writing my usual stuff.

    Thanks for your input, Ray; it means alot.


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