That really another great piece of work Atomik_sprout
The rhyming worked really well to help emphasize the concept of the poem. A dark and dreary poem about being left behind in a place where no one will be able to find you. Almost hiding away and not wanting to be found.
Can I just say that the only stanza that let you down a little was the second to last. The rhyming didn't feel right to me and almost broke the flow of the poem. Its not much of a big deal but maybe perhaps a little alteration.
I really do enjoy reading your work as they are all really thought through and a lot of emotion has been used to write some of them. I will look forward to your next piece of work.
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