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    Alone (not my best)

    Purity once had a name,
    And beauty once had a face.
    Life once had a meaning.
    And once I was safe.

    Once there was freedom,
    And once I could laugh.
    Happiness once was alive.
    And once I had another half.

    Once I shared her love,
    Once I was by her side,
    Once I felt I fitted,
    So quickly that died.

    Her grace so great,
    Her beauty so vast.
    All I ever wanted,
    Was for it to last.

    Fate maybe had another plan,
    Or maybe she had another love,
    But it all fell apart.

    The hand too big for the glove.
    Now it's all died away,
    Happiness, joy, love; all memories.
    Now I walk alone in this dark, dark world,
    With no light to guide my way.
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    Re: Alone (not my best)

    not ur best? @.@ no way... thats 10 times better than any of my poem...@.@

    ehh.. spelling needs some correction though everything else is ok i think..
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    Re: Alone (not my best)

    ok, RayMe,
    I made some corrections and I for got to add 2 lines ^^;;

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    Re: Alone (not my best)

    Lol, woah! The first two lines had me interested; the wording is just awesome. Well done.
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    happy you liked thid song too Kesai ^_^
    I might start writing songs and oh ya check out my short story if you like.

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    Re: Alone (not my best)

    Nice poem that started out sweet,but ended up sad. It's a shame he or she left you like they did. I've gone through that before and it was so awful. Keep up the good work.
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