Thread: Already drown.

OMG!!! what was that?
I can see that you are a great poet in your depression,
so all the power to you and keep writing more.
truly this poem should be in all the poem books in the world.

Wow. I'm honored that you think so highly of my writing. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it so much. THanks for the ego boost!

This poem was confusing, yet tasty at the same time. ^_^

Mmm... Tasty. LOL. On a serious note, Chan, I liked it a lot. It kinda makes me wonder what gave you the inspiration to write this. You gonna write more today?

Originally Posted by bratling

The taste of your lips lingers on my lips.
But all it does is make me sick!
It used to make my poor heart melt,
Make my knees go weak.
But now that I realize and now that,
I can clearly see.
You lies were the death of me.
Choking drowning sputtering,
Snuffing out the stars in my eyes.
Sinking down further.
Into your sea of unending lies.
Lost and adrift in your little,
Leaky row boat.
Can you see the shores of truth?
Because I think you possibly could.
Because what I see is that you,
Are already drowned in your own lies.
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Not the normal subject.(person, not topic.)

A few problems with the grammar, but overall it was a very good poem.

*salutes* good poem.. nice imagination again... @.@ good job.. kudos to u ... and i agree with divine punishment ^^

Sprout- I might... sleep deprivation tends to do me good in this department. I should sleep less often I think.

Divine punishment- Thanka you. I'm glad you enjoy it, especially cus tho I don't believe I've posted on your posts or anything, I rather appriciate what I've seen of your posts thus far. And I know the grammar wasn't the best. I tend to let it go a little when I'm writing over tired. Because it's a bit much to write and get my feelings out, when I have to worry about grammar and spelling. Spellin is my worst suit. As I'm sure you've noticed.

Rayme- THanks! I appriciate the comments from you a lot. They made me smile this morning.

wow this good you have one hell of nack for
writing keep the coming the title say eveything
keep up the good work