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    Always

    I am always by your side
    Never would I think of leaving you
    Even when you make me cry
    I couldn't imagine life without your presence

    You barely know my feelings
    You view me only as a friend
    But I want so much more
    To be yours until the end

    I look at who you've chosen
    And you continue to break my heart
    The more I try to make you see
    The more you look to someone else

    I feel no happiness without you
    I have no joy when you're away
    I hate this feeling of helplessness
    When I know that I am strong

    But I will not force you
    To be with me
    That is your choice
    And I will honor it

    But please reconsider
    Your choice to be with her
    For here beside you is where I shall stand

    And maybe one day when I am gone
    You will truly realize
    That I am that one that you are searching for

    But until then
    I am always by your side

    Last edited by NevesElocin; Apr 14, 2007 at 02:14 PM. Reason: Sorry spelling error. Thank elie26 for noticing and bringing tht to my attention

    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: Always

    aww thats a nice poem ^^ its good to see fire in the poem also.

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    Re: Always

    Thanks. I can't help it. I write what I feel. And it was also have a bad habit of writing on the spur of the moment. Thank you for the compliment though.

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    Re: Always

    Quote Originally Posted by NevesElocin View Post
    Thanks. I can't help it. I write what I feel. And it was also have a bad habit of writing on the spur of the moment. Thank you for the compliment though.
    hey no problem... wait u write what u feel?..........so im guessing that this is happening to u now..................? or something like that

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    Re: Always

    Kinda' sorta'. It doesn't have be what I'm feeling right then. It could just be whats on my mind. Somehwere in the choas I make poetry out of my feelings.

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    Re: Always

    Such a sweet poem. It's so sad when you're wanting to be with someone so much and it hurts to see them with someone else.
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    Re: Always

    Overall, I liked it The feelings was nicely potrayed, seems very real. And I felt the title suited the poem too. "Always" was a nice pick. Tho I don't think I got this line
    When I know that I am string
    Mind explaining?

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    Re: Always

    Sad poem, I like it. Good job explaining your emotions and keep it up!

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