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    Always be alone!

    As the day goes by they stand there
    in silence as she looks to him with a tear
    going down her cheek knowing she will
    never run to him as heart beckons for another.

    While he stands there holding here all he can think
    is how much he wants her to be happy knowing
    nothing of what she really wants ,but he is willing
    to do anything to make her happy, a tear now
    goes down his cheek as he holds her tighter.

    Then she stands there as she realises who she loves
    but refuses to go to him out of fear of hurting
    another which makes this moment for her even worse,
    the wind blowing now as it touches her cheek lightly
    she thinks of another now and how happy she will make him.

    Then he stands there as he feels his heart dieing inside knowing
    she will never be his because of another ,the wind now
    blowing his hair as the moment slows for him, his only thoughts
    are of her and how she will be happy soon.

    Time slows as she stands there becomeing less confused about what
    must be done as she looks to him not saying anything and kisses
    him deeply as she feels his heart break know she will never run to him,
    her head is unclouded now as she know that this moment will be his
    last with her.

    He held there as his tightened hold to her loosened , he cries a bit more
    now knowing she will be happy soon ,he begin to think about what might
    have been and the the dream fades as he grabbed her hand looking deep
    into her eyes saying* i love you so much and want your happiness to be true
    you will always come first with me nothing will ever change that so i will
    let you run to him so you can be truly happy and not be confused by me anymore* .

    And she stands there and hears this and says nothing as she walks away
    not looking back knowing her fate was chosen before the first kiss as she fades
    away in the distance leaving him there alone with the wind the only
    thing holding him now as a strong gust pulls a tear away from his eye.

    Still waiting he stands there years later he has only moments left still alone
    the wind still holding him in comfort as his thoughts still go to her
    and he smiles knowing she is happy with him.

    She lays there next to him she thinks of how she loved him more
    than the one she was with but is content with the fact she is no longer
    confused as she hold him tighter loving him more as a thought pops in her
    head of being with him and how big a mistake i would have been to be
    happier as she closes her eyes with a tear knowing she made the right choice.


    this poem is a bit long i know but it portrays what love can
    do to some people this is just one example because there are other ways
    but this way is more common i think because of the fact some people feel
    they don't deserve the love that is mentioned in this poem even though
    they do deserve it, but they refuse to see the love that they need for the
    love that happens in the spur of the moment. comments and suggestions
    are welcomed
    Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Nov 28, 2006 at 11:06 AM.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Always be alone!

    as as as as as as as as
    was all im seeing i think you need to pump up the beginning's of each paragraph more so itll sound more interresting. The poem is pretty good just some of the wording left a bad flavor and ive read alot of ur poems an i know you couldve done better enterances
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    Re: Always be alone!

    ok thanks jade i will do that and im glad you liked it i will change the those entrances no prob thansk for the sugestion
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Always be alone!

    *teary* Wow. A poem alone has never made me tear up like that before. It was very good and you poured all your emotions into this, I could tell. I loved it but it was very sad.
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