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    Always there

    Always there

    You’re depressed and lonely
    You don’t want to be alone
    Thinking that no one’s there
    But you’re wrong

    You think you aren’t the one
    You don’t think we are meant to be
    Wanting someone you can touch
    Be with and see

    Your grades are slipping
    So are mine
    You need to take a break
    To get back up to a 90

    So take the time you need
    We won’t talk for a while
    Or barely at all
    Whatever happens
    Know that I’ll always be there

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    Re: Always there

    Nicely done! But as I was reading it... "You need to take a break
    To get back up to a 90" <-----This part doesn't flow so smoothly in my opinion. However, I really like you poem overall. ^^

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    Re: Always there

    yeah.. I know.. Thanks for your honesty. That means a lot to me. I'm glad you still liked it though. ^-^

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    Re: Always there

    You really got your rhymes down.........and excellent words!!!!!!!!!!
    Great job!!!!!!!!!!1
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    Re: Always there

    Hmm... i wonder for who this poem is

    nicely done and i agree with tifa... that part dont go nicely.. :/ keep up the good work ok ^^

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    Re: Always there

    I agree with Tifa as well but good job anyways I like it! keep up the good work!
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