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    Am I Your Lover Or Just Another Doll?...

    So lost in the sea, Your soul has encased me
    Took ahold of me, Never let me leave
    My hands in yours, Keep beggin me
    Whisper sweet nothings in my ear, Maybe tell me that you love me?...

    You tell such sweet lies, How could I be so blind
    My eyes hidden behind your fingers, Ears covered with headphones
    Music playing in my head, I can no longer see the world
    Only darkness surrounds me, I can no longer see the real me...

    You mold me into what you wish, I am only your doll
    Your little play thing, Just a toy to toss away
    If I happen to break, You'll just get a new one
    Maybe if I bore you, You might just break me yourself...

    Broken into pieces, No longer being held whole
    My heart lying in my hands, Covered in blood
    Tears begin to pour from my eyes, As the skys cry out my pain along with me
    May I drown in the sea's, Maybe my loneliness will kill me?...

    Will you finish me off, Or let me rot away of a broken heart?
    How can you stand by, And watch me fall apart and die?
    So many questions unanswered, Why me?
    What was the purpose of destroying me, Whatever did I do to you?...

    Was I just something to past the time, Is it all a game to you?
    My feelings, heart, soul and body...was all of me just a pawn in your games?
    So much pain you put me through, But I still wont leave you
    Why is this, What could I get out of staying with you?...

    Someone who only causes me heartache, Your like a drug to me
    I'm addicted to you, Even though you hurt me
    Pain is all I seem to know, It's all you've even shown me
    So cruel is your touch, But I still wont turn you away...

    Your all i've ever known, You know this and use it against me
    My judgement is no good, I have no free will
    You've broken me, Locked away my heart and threw away the key
    I only belong to you now, Just like you always wanted all these years...


    " Hello Master" I say softly with no emotion in my voices and no sign of life in my eyes...

    This is what you've done to me...Are you finally happy?...

    Will it all come to an end?...Could I learn to let go, could you?...

    Can I ever live in a world where I knew no pain, can I live without you?...Would such a day ever come?...

    Has the painful dance of sorrow and tears ended?....Is this the end of you and me...finally?..


    This is just some new lyrics I came up with while I was bored Lol. Not sure if it's any good, just wrote what I was feelin at the moment lol. Please tell me what ya'll all think of it kk? Thanks!! Enjoy!! *bows* ^___^
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: Am I Your Lover Or Just Another Doll?...

    Fantastic poem Sis! It reminds of so many relationships gone wrong just like some of mine. I've felt like I was nothing more than a play thing for guys to amuse theirselves with before tossing me aside for something better. It's such a truthful song which makes that much more great.
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    Re: Am I Your Lover Or Just Another Doll?...

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinigami's_Angel View Post
    Someone who only causes me heartache, Your like a drug to me
    I'm addicted to you, Even though you hurt me
    Pain is all I seem to know, It's all you've even shown me
    So cruel is your touch, But I still wont turn you away...

    At times I'm really amazed as how well you can right and like always there is a stanza that I love above all the rest. You seem to capture how alot of people feel and put it into words and that is a great talent. The over all flow was good .. though it seemed to be missing something but I'm not sure what. Either way it's very good and I can't wait to see more of your works. Keep up the good work.

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    Re: Am I Your Lover Or Just Another Doll?...

    @ CherryBlossom18 ~ Thanks Sis!! *hugs* I'm glad ya liked it so much!! Yeah I was tryin 2 go with what I was feelin in my heart (as u already know what) and this came 2 life lol. Thanks again Sis!! ^___^

    @ fireandice ~ Thanks Fai!!! *hugs* I'm glad ya liked it so much. Well I do try my best lol. Yeah I kinda thought so 2, guess cause it was just a moment thing....and I kinda threw it together lol. Thanks again Fai!! *hugs* ^__^
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    Re: Am I Your Lover Or Just Another Doll?...

    I loved it, I couldnt see any problems with it, your pretty good at this kind of stuff!
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    Re: Am I Your Lover Or Just Another Doll?...

    Thank you Demonicloud!!! *hugs* I'm sooooo glad ya liked it!!! It always makes me happy when someone likes my work!! Well I do try my best, it is my passion after all Lol. ^__^
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