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Reply With Quotewow! youve done it again! keep it up! ^_^
another place in the lonesome season,
he loss his hope, it isn't always a world of black,
but he wishes it was.
when his dreams brek
the eyelides that beat
his disires , everything
reverses . so?
somenight he may cry,
but if the starlight
fingers his grief
he declares his certainty
and sleep.
his eyelides beat
his desires.
When you walk away
You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go
wow! youve done it again! keep it up! ^_^
Wow, that is good, But I think it would sound alittle better if you took out the in the first sentce and replace it with this. Also if you put a s at the end of sleep would sound alot better I think. But that's just me. Can't wait for your next poem. Keep it up you are doing good.
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