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    Apart We Stand Together

    Standing alone up here I shiver in the night air.
    It has become cold because you are not right there.
    Separation gets harder and harder to bear.

    Each time you shed a tear my heart feels pain.
    If you need me though I be not near there is one place I can be found.
    No matter where, you can see me for in each other’s hearts we are bound.
    Days apart, waiting drives us both insane.

    I tell the truth when I say we are nothing without each other.
    Just as I am like earth and you sky, we need one another.

    We can meet for now only in our wish-filled dreams.
    And each day that keeps passing the sun sets so slow.
    Time will never come to bring sleep or so it seems.
    It is illusion, but it does not help to know.

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    Re: Apart We Stand Together

    Nice poem beast..>>>
    Nice expression of many emotions in the poem and....>>>
    I feeled it...>>
    I feel like...>>
    the person you thought in the poem...>>>>
    I was like that person though..>>>
    Keep going on a being a good poet..>>>
    Nice poem Keep it up..>>^_^
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: Apart We Stand Together

    love itttttttttttttttttttttttt! amazing! I really love it.
    My signature pic!
    I absolutely love it!

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    Re: Apart We Stand Together

    I struggled a bit with the changes in rhyme pattern. But I can clearly tell how intentional it was. After re-reading (so that the changes weren't unexpected to me) I could appreciate its uniqueness over its difficulty. So yeah, it certainly scores points for being original.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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