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    Arador's Poetry corner

    This first one is kind of bad. It doesn't have very good Iambic pentameter (spelling)

    The Girl I Love
    By: Adam Reitz a.k.a Arador


    The girl I love is with another.
    I doubt she thinks of me at all.
    I met her on one day in summer.
    She left my life one day in fall.

    That first day I was in heaven.
    She liked the same stuff that I did.
    We talked and talked until 'round seven.
    On my joy I put a lid.

    I am a geek
    No denial
    She’s a geek
    We talked a while.

    I knew I loved her from the start
    She liked me too, she had to say.
    But on that day another part
    of that puzzle came into play.

    She met another young fine lad.
    They kept in touch all the time
    But me alone at home and sad
    thought of her and our sublime.

    But now alas I have to win
    the one I love is not with me
    The joy of love my head to spin.
    Causing my heart a terrible glee.

    How this paradox born of love,
    has put her with another.
    For the one she's with
    I love like a brother.



    The Chaos of my Mind

    I must write for ten straight minutes
    nothing can I find
    but still i sit and think about
    the chaos of my mind.

    many pencils silent scraping
    driving me insane
    many curtain's windows draping
    covering my gloomy rain


    I havent slept in 3 whole days
    my mind is racing mile a minute.
    I sit here as the door does beckon
    my pencil a window
    into my soul's white haze

    Anticipating the three dull tones
    of that blessed bell
    but still twenty minutes left
    I stop to sigh and groan

    So far I have written
    four pointless stanzas
    my mind still remains
    like the fuzz on a kitten

    Silence grating on my mind
    the hours slowly racing
    I'd prefer an uproar find
    the silent bordom mind erasing


    This one is kind of gay but I had to write somthing for school

    Chess
    By: Adam Reitz


    Thinking hard
    Many moves
    Notes on a card
    Which move to use

    Knight goes first
    Up and left
    My moves rehearsed
    His chance bereft

    Moving up
    Moving down
    King unstuck
    He won’t lie down

    But lo what now
    A turn around
    This I must disallow
    Concentration tightly wound

    Dodging left
    Up and right
    Knights wise cleft
    Stops my flight

    To lose a piece
    And play it safe
    With troops decrease
    And king to strafe

    Desperate now
    No more moves
    My king is trapped
    What skill this proves

    Doomed to live
    Within this fate
    Handshake I give
    He says checkmate

    This one is pretty good except it starts sounding like vash at the end.


    Insanity Battle
    By:Adam Reitz



    People were dying
    the weeping of mothers.
    War was everywhere
    he light that it smothers.

    The city was dark
    As the invaders dark hearts
    That came and attacked
    our inoccent ramparts

    The militia quickly gathered
    Talling guns
    They handed them out
    even to young ones.

    I'm only sixteen
    yet they threw me a gun
    Then threw me some shells
    and told the women to run

    All of the men
    filled their positions
    filed out of that curch
    and stood by partitions

    I climbed to the steeple
    a silent death viper
    I aimed out the window
    Adam the sniper

    Shots started firing
    the shootout began
    The fires they started
    Nobody ran

    Aiming for rank
    the chain of command
    It was the only chance
    our little village would stand

    I soon had him in sight
    the man in charge
    I aimed at the man
    who's men call him sarge

    I took just one shot
    just one body fell
    the reaction I started
    started spreading as well.

    confusion moved quickly
    no organization
    they started to form
    into poorly planned formation

    then came the sound
    the deadly explosion
    half the city was gone
    the battle was frozen

    another bomb went off
    and another large part
    of the city was gone
    in the beat of a heart

    yet some how we won
    fighting nearly to one man
    just two of us left
    and no soldiers in hand

    I sat there just thinking
    the steeple my jail
    my mind was to loaded
    to much killing to care

    I climbed down the ladder
    and slipped in some blood
    yet joy over came me
    as I saw my dear love

    The girl of my dreams
    was alive and well
    Yet covered in blood
    she looked like hell

    We ran to each other
    I dropped my long rifle
    Crying with sadness
    the joy couldn't stifle.

    Then one more shot
    a warmth on my chest
    the warmth of the blood
    as she went to rest.

    I looked in her eyes
    and for one final second
    we saw just each other
    from death her love beconed

    I layed her down and dove for my gun
    rolling behind a wall
    I looked for the shooter
    I heard another body fall

    Peeking around seeing the man
    though the light was dim
    I centered the hairs
    and and ran up to him.

    Looking death in the face
    he started to cry
    I asked why he killed her
    He strained a reply

    I shot him just once
    in the palm of his hand
    He started screaming
    writhing in the sand

    I pressed my barrel
    to one of his eyes
    and pulled on the trigger
    I silenced his crys

    I went back to the church
    on the alter I layed my loves body
    I prayed hard to god
    asking why he took her and not me

    I knealt on the ground
    amid blood, sweat, and hate
    I put the end of my gun into my mouth
    Ready to shoot yet I hesitate

    I took so many lives
    so many loves died
    what right do i have
    to be the one to survive

    I sat there and wrote
    but nothing would stay
    the paper went blank
    with every new page

    If anyone ever came
    Theyed know what went down.
    How all the men died
    Why bodies were on the ground

    My mind playing tricks
    the walls having voices
    my soul stretching thin
    Making bad choices

    Imprisoned in memories
    trying so hard
    to forget all the sadness
    I've had to endure

    I'm not depressed
    and I'm not insane
    I just can't let go
    of the great pain

    Now I remember
    the life I once had
    everywhere happinees
    Now so much sad

    No more can I take
    I mouth the gun's end
    and yank on the trigger
    yet nothing happenend

    I franticly look
    for another shell
    yet none can I find
    No end to my hell

    Not one stinking bullet
    In that whole god damn city
    Every cartridge was fired
    To survive was a pity

    I buried my love
    then started to wander
    just me and my gun
    gods sign not to squander

    Now I roam free
    preaching peace and tranquility
    While sharpening and honing
    My shooting ability

    only fighting for peace
    never killing a soul
    I wandered the planet
    nothing filling the hole

    Now I must end
    this tale of sad timing
    If ever you need me
    Just pray to god and maybe you'll find me



    Rage Poem
    by adam reitz


    The rage that fills me also sustains me
    I live off its fury and drink of its intensity
    maybe one day it will kill me
    until then I fight for life and for fun

    The monster inside me kills me all day
    then comes the night when it comes out to play
    thrashing and writhing with cravings for death
    the hate I run on fleas on screaming breath

    What do I care if somone else dies
    as long as its no one dear to me
    I could care less about anything
    physical pain was often solace

    That was my logic a long time ago
    most of it's stayed least the rage and the hate
    now people like me more than then
    most of the pains gone I feel great
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    Re: Arador's Poetry corner

    aw cool dude. I like it, but kinda out there. No words. that get you lost, but I had a pic so it was good
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    I'll have more later. so I hope everyone reads them.
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    Re: Arador's Poetry corner

    arador.... that name sounds so very fimiliar >_<
    Hmmm, i like the poems, a lil so-so on the first one. THe second one is better in my opinion.
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    I'll just keep editing my first post to add more.
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    Re: Arador's Poetry corner

    Quote Originally Posted by arador
    I'll just keep editing my first post to add more.
    i like the first one and can i add u to my buddy list?

    Tanks zyta

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    sure That would be fine. You can add me to your buddy list.
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    Re: Arador's Poetry corner

    Why thank you. I hope you all like the new insanity battle I posted. I also started a journal for my story.
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