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    From the Ashes.

    A heart full of resentment...
    ... Is just a heart of stone.
    I never want what I ask for, when I say "leave me alone".

    So afraid of loneliness.
    Yet, needing what I fear.
    Paving a path for clarity , while everything's unclear.

    I don't see myself in mirrors...
    ... I have no pride for vanity.
    Reflections only show my pain, the swelling of insanity.

    I hear no tiny voices crying.
    No pitter patter of tiny feet.
    And every inch, of every space, just reeks of my epic defeat.

    Don't ever forget what I told you.
    Despite what I say or do.
    As much as it may not be healthy, a piece will still belong to you.

    So attracted to the flame...
    ... I let everything around me burn.
    But from the ashes a phoenix will rise, the greatest lesson will be learned.

    And tiny voices, tiny feet...
    ..and all that has been ripped apart...
    will break down all these tainted mirrors. and finally will heal my heart.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: From the Ashes.

    it's been a long time since I was here.. but as far I as I remember..
    your poems were always great..

    I have been stuck in a rut for a while, but seeing this piece
    I am willing to try once again..

    thank you Peach...

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    Re: From the Ashes.

    I didn't like this till the end. Not because it wasn't well written, because it really was. That part I liked. But I didn't like the way it made me feel. (Which is...lost, and...emptyish.)

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: From the Ashes.

    Reminds me of Keats a little bit. Good job. The third stanza was surely the kill stanza.

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    Re: From the Ashes.

    dark, depressing, almost haunting, and brilliantly written. I really liked it.

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