Well let me put it this way,
you have captured the very soul of an assassin in this poem.
I like to read more of your work, and I really like it.*honest opinion*
The assassin
Preparations
Gripping the double edged knife
His fingers skim across the tip
Blood gushes out.
The beginning
Footsteps, scurrying around
As he approaches from afar
Like ants on fire.
Unseen, unheard
His movements swift
No sound is heard
A ghost.
Endings
The victim enters a corner
Face to face with a dead end
Caught in a cage.
The deed
He stabs into the victim
A pool of blood swirls beneath
Lost hope.
Realization
Staring at himself in the puddle
He freezes over and stops
What am I now?
Monster
Drowning in his guilt and pity
Lost in the pit of darkness
He doesn’t resurface.
I know this is horrible, perhaps a waste of space, I dunno. Confusing and awful. Yeah .. still like to hear some critic tho ._.
Well let me put it this way,
you have captured the very soul of an assassin in this poem.
I like to read more of your work, and I really like it.*honest opinion*
agreed with overload... ^^ captured it nicely...
Hmm... nice style..and your imagination is nice as well ^^ description is good too
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I love your poem. It had amazing imagery (ants on fire being the most potent for me). I hope to see more from you!
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