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    Astray

    Astray of the Night
    Flawlessly winding in bliss
    Drifting towards love
    Alternately swaying in the midst of happiness
    The astray of the night found itself momentarily full of love
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    Re: Astray

    Lovely imagery and short and to the point. Only suggestion I can think of is to change the word "amidst" in the forth line to midst. I think it would flow better that way.

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