Thread: Attentions

Omg!! I'm speachless!!! I soooooo love this Fai, it's amazing!! Your choice of words brung forth a wonderful picture 2 me. I could see it all play before my eyes as I read this. Once again this is amazing Fai!! ^___^

this poem is streiight from the hear i like that
and love reallyis complicated and to vie for the attention
of the one you love can be hard but if love is really in the works
things wllgo your way.

i likethis poemand how it shows that attention
makes the heart feelmoreloved than any actions will almost.

Originally Posted by fireandice

This was a result of a challenge made to me. I swear, one of these days a challenge is going to be my undoing.lol Well I hope it's atleast a good read for everyone.



All alone in my room, all I can do is think of you.
I toss and turn but find no relief in sight.
How can just thoughts of you make me ache so?
Words, images, and scenes play out in my mind.

Muscles tighten, the ache only intensifies.
I close my eyes and drift away,
In my own world now I hear you voice.
I feel your hands on me and gasp.

I want you and only you.
Your touch can make me scream your name.
You speak the words I want to hear,
Do all the things I want you to do.

Breathing shallow, heartbeats rapid,
Feelings spiral out of control.
Your name cried out from my lips.
The dreams state around me slowly fades away.

Thoughts return to normal, loneliness awaits.
A smile still crosses my face, I have you
If only in my mind……I wonder
If I asked for your attentions, would you grant them?

Hey!!thats from a book!!i've read it!!its called "Scribbler of Dreams"!!

It's great how much it shows how someone is so devoted towards another person they love. I can definitely imagine the descriptions portrayed. I think this poem has a lot of potential.

I swear I need to remember to read more of your work. Because I really love it. Your wording is usually simple but elegant and the story/feelings you provoke give me a smile. Not to mention you make me empathize and remember feeling a lot of the things mentioned in your works. Keep it up buddy!