Awakening

P.R. Princess · Apr 24, 2006, 05:08 PM

Hello members of AO
I had just made like my first poem and I want your opinion about it.
Also if you think I change the title because I'm not to sure about it
well any way here it is

Awakening

When evil rules all,
an awakening voice from inside calls.
Those destined
will listen
and save the world from evils deep intentions

From the depths of the forrests
to the highest peek of a mountain
and from the desert sands
to the vast oacens

The destined will come and awaken all
to the true call.

Well thats it hope you liked it

viper11025 · Apr 24, 2006, 05:12 PM

Hey your getting it.
Nice work.
Keep it up.

P.R. Princess · Apr 24, 2006, 05:14 PM

Thank alot and I support your manga

viper11025 · Apr 24, 2006, 05:42 PM

Thanks alot.
I guess were supportive./heh

*ketaro* · Apr 24, 2006, 06:40 PM

awesome peom, it was really kool, keep it up.

P.R. Princess · Apr 25, 2006, 03:56 PM

you r supportive I think any way

kedar · Apr 28, 2006, 11:01 PM

Wow! Another unique poem that I read today. I truly love it, from start to finish. You did a great job!!!!! As for the title, it suits perfectly, so if you ask me, I will ask you to keep it. A title is meant to offer the reader the overall meaning of the poem, and yours did do that. Keep up the amazing, and I hope to see more.

^_^

-Kedar-

*Rave_Grip* · Apr 28, 2006, 11:06 PM

Coola keep it up!

Shu · Apr 28, 2006, 11:43 PM

good job, keep up the good work...

Apr 24, 2006, 05:08 PM	#1 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,170	Awakening Hello members of AO I had just made like my first poem and I want your opinion about it. Also if you think I change the title because I'm not to sure about it well any way here it is Awakening When evil rules all, an awakening voice from inside calls. Those destined will listen and save the world from evils deep intentions From the depths of the forrests to the highest peek of a mountain and from the desert sands to the vast oacens The destined will come and awaken all to the true call. Well thats it hope you liked it
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Apr 24, 2006, 05:12 PM	#2 (permalink)
viper11025 Under Surveilance Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ughh....Ask? Posts: 359 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 537	Re: Awakening Hey your getting it. Nice work. Keep it up.
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Apr 24, 2006, 05:14 PM	#3 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,170	Re: Awakening Thank alot and I support your manga
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Apr 24, 2006, 05:42 PM	#4 (permalink)
viper11025 Under Surveilance Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ughh....Ask? Posts: 359 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 537	Re: Awakening Thanks alot. I guess were supportive./heh
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Apr 24, 2006, 06:40 PM	#5 (permalink)
ketaro Its Over 9000! Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,226 Thanks: 27 Thanked 31 Times in 29 Posts Credits: 23,390	Re: Awakening awesome peom, it was really kool, keep it up.
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Apr 25, 2006, 03:56 PM	#6 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,170	Re: Awakening you r supportive I think any way __________________ ~GUNSLINGER~A7X=MIA~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~ ~I give my heart and everything to my sailor~
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Apr 28, 2006, 11:01 PM	#7 (permalink)
kedar Warrior Monk Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Monk Society Posts: 2,971 Thanks: 3 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 17,275	Re: Awakening Wow! Another unique poem that I read today. I truly love it, from start to finish. You did a great job!!!!! As for the title, it suits perfectly, so if you ask me, I will ask you to keep it. A title is meant to offer the reader the overall meaning of the poem, and yours did do that. Keep up the amazing, and I hope to see more. ^_^ -Kedar- __________________
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Apr 28, 2006, 11:06 PM	#8 (permalink)
Rave_Grip I hate idiots on AO. Kill Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Life is an illusion. Posts: 2,314 Thanks: 0 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 14,887	Re: Awakening Coola keep it up! __________________ Wherever you see, there is always 98% of people who love something; and 2% that don't. I'm pretty sure that not ALL 98% of peeps don't support Lolita or anything. So if you agree, put it in your sig. \| .:~My AO Gallery~:. \| \| .:~The AO Rules~:. \|
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Apr 28, 2006, 11:43 PM	#9 (permalink)
Shu Upcoming Legend Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 563 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 749	Re: Awakening good job, keep up the good work...
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