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    Babble

    I have written in awhile...sorry but this one is a bit short...I hope you like it though ^-^



    This place is dim and the people are dull witted.

    My hand finds my hair, tugging slightly the top of
    my scalp lifts and butterflies barrel out like a tornado.

    My body tremors as I land at the end of the rabbit
    hole, my skin is snow, and my eyes are coal.

    I seek to find your warming touch and eyes of green-gold,
    just look in the dark and you will find my melting hand.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Babble

    very good i like it .very emotional and i love the feelings............can't wait for more
    keep it ↑ ♥~*The Princess*~♥
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: Babble

    Thankies ...the only thing I hate about it is that it was so short...but then again some of the greatest poems ever were shorter.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Babble

    Hmmm... Short, but yet beautifully well written... I liked the "eyes are coal" part, such dark sadness... Keep up the good work short or long I will love to read more...

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    Thank you very much ^-^ I appreciate your thoughts...it helps alot
    Dear Dinah...

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