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    Balance

    Poetry in motion,
    Like dancers these warriors are,
    Their feet glide effortless over the floor,
    Their eyes trained on each other,
    Watching for every moment,
    Trying to predict the others' move.

    Their swords shining in the moonlight,
    Shadows become a blur,
    Sounds of metal clashing against metal,
    They've made fighting an art form.
    Both having their hair tied back,
    One wearing black and the other white.

    Both trying to find the balance,
    As they are lock in combat,
    They look in each other eyes,
    They realise the balance they search for,
    Is each other.
    Both calm and peaceful,
    But willing to fight to the death for each other.

    They soon put their swords away,
    Embrace and press their lips together into a kiss,
    Their hands travel over their bodies,
    Knowing the others' bodyscape.
    Every curve, every scar, every line,
    They are perfectly balance together.

    mmm i thought i try writing a poem in third person view. not sure if this is but anyways enjoys and comments are welcome!

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    Re: Balance

    I like it alot Jason. ^_^ I like your poems because you always somehow put love into it...which is uber kawaii! Shows that you are romantic! Teehee ^///^. Yesh, I believe it is in 3rd person, because it's like you're watching.
    Wuv you! <3

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    Re: Balance

    Yay! Imagery done well. nice job on the poem. I was actually drawn in to read more.
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    Re: Balance

    nice perspective i loved this idea i have always sucked
    at trying this my self but you did really good awesome
    poem.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Balance

    nice ideas and good flow
    my fav. part is:
    Their swords shining in the moonlight,
    Shadows become a blur,
    Sounds of metal clashing against metal,
    They've made fighting an art form.
    Both having their hair tied back,
    One wearing black and the other white
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    Don't tell me the sky is the limit, when there are footprints on the moon


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    Re: Balance

    glad you guys liked it. i was really surprised that i didnt do a poem in third person view

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Balance

    Yay!! Its third person!! It wasnt what I was imagining which makes it really unique.. I like this better. My ideas were a bit off.. lol Great job!
    Thank you Lasura!
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    Re: Balance

    Quote Originally Posted by rksamurai View Post
    Yay!! Its third person!! It wasnt what I was imagining which makes it really unique.. I like this better. My ideas were a bit off.. lol Great job!
    Its very uniqu very imaginative too.
    'Their swords shining in the moonlight,
    Shadows become a blur,' was the best part of it.

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