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    Bare Night Sonata

    There was a chilling sensation about,
    The moon was out,
    And the night beckoned drawn out calls.

    With a tune from the moon
    And the star signs gold
    There was little left but our souls.

    We danced all through the dark lit day
    This travesty of blight,
    We couldn’t say-
    What we had then
    May or may not be our flight.

    Though we flew like birds with crystal wings
    Ours faces bright with joyful sing,
    This sin we faced was pure and bold
    No god nor entity could behold..

    Truth was set that very night
    With our thoughts like distant kites
    Where we toasted to the sky,
    The moon and the night,
    For we dined in the midst
    Of cold and fright.

    "Walk in with Reason, and leave with Passion."

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    Re: Bare Night Sonata

    You've got quite the knack for writing descriptive, yet almost mystical poetry. I like that! ^_^

    It looks like there'll be some new competition in POTM from now on, huh? LOL.

    On a serious note, this poem was well put together. I can't say that I found a single thing wrong with it. Good ups and keep up the awesome job!


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    Re: Bare Night Sonata

    The words are full of mystery and silent wisdom.........and they give the poem more depth and an identity......
    Excellent job!!!
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    Re: Bare Night Sonata

    Hmmm... this created immages in my head, especially these lines:
    There was little left but our souls.

    We danced all through the dark lit day
    lol ^^ It just made me immagine lights dancing in a forest or alike... it was nice ^^ and it has inspired me to write about something... mystical, vague and untracable, which I never actually have done

    And I agree with Astaroth, your words are full of wisdom and magic, something that I find is missing in most poems and something I would like to wish to gain in my writing

    Well nice work. And I'm waiting forward for more, as usual ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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