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Reply With QuoteHey good job I like it
its in a similar style to mine (Last Kiss)
the ending was a lil abrupt
but over all it flows well =D
So long we been fighting
Sending soldier's to war
When will the killing stop?
What good is this for?
Battle brings death
Guns firing in the sky
Only people are killing people
So many suffering and dying
We know war is lethal
Death brings sorrow
Family cries for their loss
fathers, mothers, sisters, brothers mourn
Never to forget their loss
But, they felt their hearts torn
Feel revenge of a wraith
Taking vengeance in anger
Killing the one they hate
There is no mercy
Taking their only fate
No end till tommorrow
Ending lives by the hand
Leaving no one to live
Feeling like a man
But, how are we to forgive
this poem came from my journal but I did a remix with it lol, but sounds like I hate america for some reason.
Hey good job I like it
its in a similar style to mine (Last Kiss)
the ending was a lil abrupt
but over all it flows well =D
Thanks I tried to figure out an ending so thats how I came up with lol.
Originally Posted by hellknight
oh dont worry you did good
I hate endings there almost as hard to do as beginings lol
now middles ... lol
once I get on track its hard to stop lol
Ooooo it's terrific ^_^ I like the theme. It's so realistic and shows how people sufer when they loose people and watch them pass away. I love it.
I like i8t. Your poem is really good. Don't worry there are many reasons to hate the US and you found a big one. lol. I hate the US right now too. Well I really like the poem and hope to see more of your work.(^.^)
@rave_grip: thanks homes apprecite it man
@P.R. Princess: lol don't worry you'll see more of my work soon, and thank you for a awesome comment.
I like your choice of theme because it reflects what is happening in society at the moment.It also flows quite well until the ending(I think) and the reader can be connected to the ideas of what you wrote.NIce job.
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