Thread: Battle - Family Issues

Auch!!!! >.< too personal of a theme, but I read those really emotional works here and told the reader a lot about your personal life...

Shortly... I voted for AngelicDemon, because it seemed more emotional and created real images and feelings in me, while Inruto's was just like a story that I'm watching from aside, I just could conect myself to Angelic's poem more. And i think you should have parted it in stranzas (I say that just as one of the people who has a sight memory and who loves everything organized and for whom it's hard to receive information if it's not easy to overview...)

it was odd how you both have quite sad poems and how you both end it happy... its nice to see optimistic people around...

Anyways... nice work you both!

Originally Posted by Lasura

Auch!!!! >.< too personal of a theme, but I read those really emotional works here and told the reader a lot about your personal life...

Shortly... I voted for AngelicDemon, because it seemed more emotional and created real images and feelings in me, while Inruto's was just like a story that I'm watching from aside, I just could conect myself to Angelic's poem more. And i think you should have parted it in stranzas (I say that just as one of the people who has a sight memory and who loves everything organized and for whom it's hard to receive information if it's not clear- easy to overview...)

it was odd how you both have quite sad poems and how you both end it happy... its nice to see optimistic people around...

Anyways... nice work you both!

Aww.. well thank you Laura... But I think Inuruto did a fantastic job. ^-^ Such skill and talent.

You truly did a great job. I never thought that i would get a vote for mine and I can't wait to see who wins. ^-^ Good luck. ^-^ -salutes-

You both made me cry... Not only are both poems well written and extremely well worded. But they're highly felt. I identified with inaruto's poem just a bit more because it felt like me talking about my family. Except I'm not the youngest and our mix is a little different. But I know just exactly how the speaker feels in BOTH poems. Except my lost little girl never got the justice of jail time or even an identity of her molester. Kudos to you both for writing entierly wrenching poems.

i loved angels poem it read like a letter
you would write someone when you want them
to know how life is going for you , you know like killing them with
kindness.

its sad that it happened but you taking something positive
is a plus and you are pretty brave to put yourself out here like
this , and i know it wasn't easy but you really have guts talking about
it unlike other people who have that happen , i really liked the poem a lot.

h my gosh i'm tearing up! so sad both of you, i'm not voting i think you both did an exceptional job! keep up the good work both of you!

Such amusing poems but in my vote i had to choose AngelicDemon201092 because it really sounded if it i were there in my own eyes even though i still hear stories about it, though i cannot say wheter is happening anywhere is just this poem has convinced me true enough because of the words i read.

I loved both of them..! They both show pain in which I can see... I can feel both of your pain which saddens me... I want to say sorry for the both of you even though it might not help or that I actually was not the one who caused the hurt in both of your lives... Then again sorry might not be the right word to say, since you all probably don't want to feel like no ones charity case or have pity that leads to sympathy... I just hate to see someone who has been hurt or was in so much pain... < Even though just about everyone has to go through it in life >

I know displaying such emotion can make one feel vulnerable, but I just want to be the one to congratulate the both of you for having the courage to talk about ones' pain that is so personal...

Well like I said I loved both of them it makes it hard to vote, but I guess I will go with Inuruto's poem for the simple fact I know pretty much know what he is talking about & where he is coming from & what actually went down amongst his family... And I must say it is a heartbreaker not saying that Angel's isn't either it is just that Inuruto makes me feel like I am there an outsider looking in & can picture each & everyone of his family problems in which that sculpted him & the pain he keeps... (Didn't think I caught on to that ;p )

I must say to the both of you don't stop talking about you all pain cause poetry or verbally speaking is a good way to vent out the stress, hurt, pain ect.. < Keep up the good work the both of you >

I have a request: that the both of you write another one about this issue cause you both played it on the safe side, but I can understand... Like I said it isn't easy feeling vulnerable, but "vulnerability leads to being indestructible"...

"It is easy to tear someone down, but difficult to build someone up"...
< Which one do you like doing..? >