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    Battle magic

    Sorcerers and shamans, weave your spells of war,
    Ensure our mighty sword-arms are the strongest and the quickest.
    Entwine us with great battle magic 'til we stand knee-deep in gore,
    And by all the gods, we'll ride to where the fray rages the thickest!
    Fr3aK~0f~N@Tu|23

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    Re: Battle magic

    I really liked the idea behind this poem. Short but filled with imagery. I think the wording could be worked on.
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    Re: Battle magic

    not evryone has perfect grammar ye know?
    but still it has long lines that makes the poem like with 8 lines if u divide em...
    its really nice.



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: Battle magic

    I never said anything about grammar, Ball. I meant wording. As in the way you word things. I know that english isnt your first language. Hell, I'm even learning spanish myself! Estoy practicando mi espanol!
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