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    The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    Sunny summer days by the beach.
    It's where we polish and bleach our shell collection.
    Always bright and blight,
    the beautiful white days.

    The sand castle we built,
    is now brushed by guilt.
    Stomped by a wolf,
    It can't even withstand a "woof".

    What more of a storm...

    I thought it was strong,
    it figures that i was wrong.
    All our efforts went to waste,
    because we went too haste.

    Now, only the foundation is left.
    We mourn as our reaction.
    The wolf snears with satisfaction.
    We both show no facination.

    Until another sun shines and drove away the storm...

    Shines upon me with shimmering grace,
    the shiny blaze.
    For she who i will hold on to,
    and me who is her world.

    Together we shall build another castle.
    This time we will go slow and not hastle and bustle.
    So intact that even the wolf cannot harm it.
    Slowly it will keep our eggs of love safe and warm.

    It will stood there even there is a raging storm...

    Looking back at the old site.
    It is tarnished and scratched by the wolf's bites.
    I know it is still not satisfied,
    but this time i will put an even greater fight.

    To protect our love, cherish the memories....
    They will never fade through the centuries...
    I promise this to you both...
    and this shall be my written oath...


    Hmm...if u live be the beach...where theres a lot of strays... :/ this happens enjoy ^^ my oath...

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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    Wow... That was a really amazing poem Ray, i must say i'm impressed, some long peoms can be a little boring to read, but yours are really good though it was a little long it keept on being interesting

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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    another experimental... and i put my heart into this xD ^^ thx.. glad u liked it ^^

    really? i never thought of it be like that..

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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    I don't know... Maybe it's just me that's like that...

    It looks like your experiments turns out really good for you

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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    really nice poem ray.it's long but interesting to.when i saw the title i didn't thought that the poem it's about love.anyway it's a very good poem

    "If you need something to worship, then worship life - all life, every last crawling bit of it! We're all in this beauty together!" - Frank Herbert

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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    Hmmm... the title don't go with it right? sheesh

    yea... it's cool i could do something like that *drools* xD
    ty ^^ im happy it does...

    Ty arekaendra im glad u liked it ^^ oh.. i want to suprise u guys...i love methaphores.. XD


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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    Thats a great poem RayMe.I approve
    You make great poems

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    Re: The beach, storm, wolf, and the sand castle

    Lol fritz ^^ ty... but im still newbie with this stuff.. lol... this is my third rhyming poem so far... im going out of words already.. :/ xD

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