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    became a Vampire

    I wrote this just for passing time , i don't think it's that good but i thought of sharing it , so here it is [ it's my first time writing something like this so go easy on me ]
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    The Name of those who have rained upon us, from the darkness set here
    In front of us, the impure souls of those who walked between us,
    The past that we held dear, decided our fates from long ago,
    But I never knew a happy past, and I never cared about the glory of my future.
    The struggle I set, in a long term trying to forget, that night that I
    Can not forget, I could never forget my bride's pale corpse, her
    Sweet voice silenced, her warming smile faded and the love I couldn't
    Let go off vanished.
    The pureness that I once saw in my self turned into darkness, the whiteness
    Of my heart stained by vengeance in my thoughts, I had but one way to gain
    Enough power to avenge her, I had but to give my self to the darkness
    So I began searching these endless lands for a man that will agree to
    Help me, after four years of searching; I came forth to a castle,
    A castle led by a man that awakens only in the night, a man that was called
    The Count Dracula, a man that became a legend, a legend for his
    Evil brutality and the darkness of his condemned victims.
    As I said I had but one way to avenge her and that is to become darkness
    It self, to become deaths own guardian.
    As I entered the dark empty castle, the bloody flow of its air, the fear that
    Sets even the strongest of men to his knees, it was nothing but the memories of her
    Smiles that kept me going all these years and her smiles will not stop me now,
    The bloody corpses that are lying in front of me, ripped into pieces and as I was lowering my Eyes to see the blood covered floor and the blood stained walls, the cold air that surrounded me, Gave me the feeling of his presence, the blood thirsty vampire, the vampire that came standing behind me, And as I slowly turned my face, I saw his gazing red eyes, his cold red eyes gazing at me with it's Merciless intent to kill, his mouth that opened and started to create its words, asking me what brings you here? And I slowly said I came seeking power, seeking vengeance against those who killed my loved one, After a moment the vampire became right beside me and said “those who give up the light shall be banished to eternal Darkness, you shall not become dead nor alive, you shall become a true vampire “without hesitation I said “I shall become thy holder of darkness, I shall become pure as the night and evil as the darkness in my heart”
    He turned to face me and slowly opened his lips with his fangs awakening; he said “your fate has been sealed”
    As he slowly pierced his fangs in my neck, the screams of those who have suffered the same fate as me, I heard all the screams of the suffering, at that night,
    I Became Darkness it self, I Became a True
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    Re: became a Vampire

    very awesome and dark i loved how you were so detailed in this poem
    you did greta for your first time. i loved how you described the feeling of dread when walkig nito his castle then saying how you heard the screams of his past victims as he bit you. very cool man hope you dso another one this was awesome
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: became a Vampire

    so long lines of the poem i took it as a good story and bloody keep em coming i like it.



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    Re: became a Vampire

    I liked it.......It used the tried and true theme of going to the dark side out of vengeance. I want a red room.............
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    Re: became a Vampire

    I like it. Detailed and sweet! It made me want to keep on reading until the end of the poem. =D
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