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    Behind Glassy eyes

    So you think that you can stand
    You think that your a man
    You wait untill she cryes
    You wait till she says 'i wish i could just die'

    Well what do you think now
    as she is liying there
    helpless
    and in despare

    She is starring at you
    and you look in to her eyes
    And you know that your in trouble
    Cause you see behind the glassy eyes

    There behind the walls
    Is the dark abyss
    The Lonlyness
    The Hatred
    The sorrow

    The Love that was there
    Has turned into The thing that you fear

    Behind the Glassy eyes you see no soul
    You know you took it from her
    You know she wants it back
    Then Your Falling into Black

    Behind those Glassy eyes
    There is no Girl there
    Behind those Glassy eyes
    Your sure that shes not there

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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    wow that was really good.........sad and depressing..........but good

    anyways keep up the good work
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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    Behind those Glassy eyes
    There is no Girl there
    Behind those Glassy eyes
    Your sure that shes not there

    i like how you leave a question at the end
    that makes you think about it. the pem it
    self left me wondering if she was dead or dieing
    from the loss of the love with the glassy look in her
    eye's and how you was referring to her as fading from
    a love that she once had. i loved this poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    waay depressing, but there's nothin wrong with that, keep it up

    thanks to zyta for the sick sig and avy!

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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    Spelling, punctuation, grammar, and capitilization is need dearly in this poem. the structure was awesome. I love the way you set up the poem. Though, poetry is not only about emotion. It's also about the english language. Try to re-read your poems for spelling errors.
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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    Behind those Glassy eyes
    There is no Girl there
    Behind those Glassy eyes
    Your sure that shes not there
    I like this satnza the most because it leave us wondering about the girl your poem ias talking about.

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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    It's very good! Sometimes it is the depressing ones that are better, and that one captured the mood nicely.
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    Re: Behind Glassy eyes

    THE QUESTION AND AT the end tioed it off perfectly :0 good sad poem
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