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    Benediction

    Ok everyone...I know I haven't posted a poem in FOREVER...and I am sorry I have had writers block terribly. Just so you all know this poem is probably really crappy. It's the best I could do at this moment. I hope you like ^-^


    I see I am shaking but I know I shouldn't be afraid,
    I never prayed for hope in the first place.

    My face never seems to be the same.

    Running with scissors, I never prayed for
    sense in the first place.

    It finally stopped raining for today.
    I can still feel the glas shards breaking away.

    Food looks white with blue sifting through.

    The sun burns dull and the moon
    burnt to nothing at noon.

    Falling, I never prayed for wings in the first place.

    Behind the black and white I knew a
    useful world where we never ruined it.

    I'll only last if that's what you want.

    Changing, I never prayed to stay the same in the first place.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Benediction

    I'm glad to see you post a poem again ^^ I really am!!! And it's quite ok, I enjoyed reading it... it's very interesting...

    It's sad but has some weird optimism in it after all- you say something sad and then say you never prayed for the good anyways... it's so weird but I can really understand it- life is as it is and there's no big use to change it...

    I'll be really waiting forward for something more ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Benediction

    It took me rereading tihs to really like it. The first time I stumbled through it. But the second time I actually got it. I'm slow sometimes. I really like this. The way you presented it and worded everything. Beautiful I hope to see more of your writing.

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    Re: Benediction

    Thank you both ^-^ It wasn't as good as I wanted it to be...but oh well...I tried. I am glad you both liked it anyhow
    Dear Dinah...

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