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    Betrayal

    Betrayal

    Here I sit
    Think and cry
    Why did you do it?

    Here I thought you loved me
    But there you cry because
    She broke your heart

    Do I matter anymore?
    I leave for a bit
    You want another

    Explain to me
    Why do you love me?
    When you apparently want her

    I cry, I'm in pain
    Never did you realize
    You hurt me

    Why I ask again
    You don't notice do you
    You probably wouldn't know

    My heart been torn
    My soul crashed
    My tears spill
    (Dip drop dip drop)

    You betrayed me again
    I may have did it once
    But why be this harash?

    Would it matter if I left?
    Do I matter anyway?
    This betrayal is too much

    I love you so deeply
    Now I question you love for me
    Out of everyone you betrayed me
    ♥ (¯'·._.·[GEISHA ゲイシャ]·._.·'¯) ♥

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    Re: Betrayal

    Wow ... awesome poem really! I love it ! Nice use of words

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    Re: Betrayal

    I thought that poem was really skillful. >-> Well, because you had a good choice of description and the situation.

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    Re: Betrayal

    Hmm.... very deep and dramatic

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    Re: Betrayal

    Wow, that was very nice, my girlfriend says she liked it too, so we're both giving you our compliments.

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    Re: Betrayal

    i didnt do anything. i just thought your poem was reflected on real emotions. thats all.

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    Re: Betrayal

    She wouldnt thought that if u didnt put *omg im so sorry!* ne ways. Cool poem. If u ready 2 rid ur loser boyfriend. Im here 4 ya
    Last edited by Eureka-Seven16; Sep 19, 2006 at 10:21 AM.

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    Re: Betrayal

    Omg! *crys* That was sooo beautiful Hiei! Awesome poem! Such heart breaking sadness and betrayal.And I can sooo relate 2 this,since it has happened 2 me before lol Anyway,awesome job as always Hiei!
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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