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    Better left untitled.

    In a world where darkness resides all over,
    The land where warmth is the only sign of hope,
    A constant reminder that you’re alive and feeling,
    But cannot escape the darkness

    Welcome to a land where emancipation evaporates
    Where rouge constantly flows through the spineless, sentimental stratum
    The only thing you can do to keep the whole ... alive
    Is not to slit

    This is my heart, where fear consistently conquers the depths of my soul
    Even if I try to relax, forget; constantly try to hope for the best
    All I see is darkness, all I feel is warmth

    All I hear is –
    Ta dhump ... ta dhump .... Ta .. dhump ......................... ta dhump
    My heart skips a beat

    My eyes open out wide
    Reality sets in
    Staring nothing at particular
    Except for the warm greeny shades, the gentle blue sky

    The bright bars of golden light flowing from the heavens
    Keeping me cozy, making me not to regret that I am existing and well kept
    Whenever I think of you, I get lost and get dominated by the thoughts of you

    This is what I feel, see and go through when I think of you

    You are my warmth; you are the one conceiving exultancy within me
    You are my addiction, you are my rouge
    You make me skip my heartbeats

    What have you done to me? I laugh out aloud.
    Oh god will I die if I let go of her?

    Again I close my eyes, knowing I can’t have you ...
    All those thoughts flood in. I start to give up on hope ...

    Just as when I feel a amalgam of cool and warm wind
    Gently caress my face
    As if it were real.

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    Re: Better left untitled.

    Wow that's really dark and sad at the same time. Good job on that one. It's not always possiable to bring out both thos emotions at the same time but you did it really well. It's a really good poem.

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    Re: Better left untitled.

    awwww such a sad yet great love poem ..... who's the lucky girl u likes ^^ great poem

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    Re: Better left untitled.

    Woohoo! 2 strikes! Thank you girls, but this is just a poem ^_^ candies for you all.

    @FAI - The bottom part where it starts with the sun was supposed to lighten up the mood :O

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    this is truly a lovely poem with lots of feelings... there are so many images that come to mind while reading this.. it was beautifully written.

    I don't think that i will ever forget it. You have such feelings for this person and i know that she will love it.

    Keep up the good work.

    To be honest though.. it should have a title.. hidden or not.

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    wow^^ very descriptive words, i enjoyed reading it! u did a good job
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    Re: Better left untitled.

    Haha, thank you Jamie and everyone, I appreciate it. The reason I didn't put a title is that I just didn't know what to call it.

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    wow thats really sad but i did enjoy reading it! it rememinds me of my died heart!

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