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    Beyond the bounds of Life


    In this world full of relentless loves and hates,
    We struggle to survive each trial and tribulation.
    Never knowing what obstacles will impede us,
    Striving to achieve and go beyond the bounds.

    Beginning to learn about what life has to offer,
    Our minds begin to formulate a predestined plan.
    A world full of new opportunity begins to unfurl,
    Each person is given a glimpse beyond the bounds.

    Learning that love and pain is a part of the big plan,
    We start to search for that perfect person in our lives.
    Shrouded in the world’s uncertain mysteries of torment,
    Our hearts allow us to excel and go beyond the bounds.

    Now knowing what lies ahead on our destined paths,
    Everyone begins the struggle to survive and succeed.
    For now it is no longer and internal battle in the mind,
    The battle is for each person to beyond his/her bounds.

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    Yo Blue man, I like the 2nd verse of this poem, I give a 10 out 10 so far, keep it up man am looking forward to read the next one.

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    OMG!!! Another amazing poem Fox!!! I soooooooooooo love this!!! Amazing and wonderful as always Fox!! The words speack with such emotion and I just fell in love with it. Can't wait 2 see more.
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    I very much enjoyed this poem, BlueFox. You did a very nice job with opening your poem with that first verse. Second verse, Edward Elric and the gate to the other side popped up in my mind. Probably because of this line:

    Each person is given a glimpse beyond the bounds.
    Nice job Fox. Hope to see more work from you.

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    Hellsknight: Thanks for the awesome comment homey! I'll try to keep them coming, my poems seem to work better when I have a theme or something!

    Shingami's_Angel: Thanks my Angel for the awesome comment!*hugs* I'm glad that you like this one, I'll do my best not to disappoint you!

    The White Wolf: Thank you for the awesome comment and I never thought about Full Metal alchemist when I wrote this poem, but your right it does remind me of Edward Elric and the door known as truth! Thank you!

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    Well what can i say escept for I'm left speechless i_i
    Really it's genious! ^_^ The wording is perfect, the meanng is clear and even though it's short it's one of the best I've ever rad ^_^

    Keep 'em comming!

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip View Post
    Well what can i say escept for I'm left speechless i_i
    Really it's genious! ^_^ The wording is perfect, the meanng is clear and even though it's short it's one of the best I've ever rad ^_^

    Keep 'em comming!
    Thanks Rave for the awesome comment! I appreciate you reading my poem and I will do just that and keep them coming!

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    Re: Beyond the bounds of Life

    well its excellently written or typed. great wording, excellent form, makes me thing about the road that im on and what lies beyond the bounds.
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