Birdie ( sorry again high on sugar )

Forgotten soul · May 19, 2007, 01:20 PM

Birdie, birdie, in the sky,
why'd you do that in my eye?
Looks like sugar,
Tastes like sap,
OMG! IT'S BIRDIE CRAP!

AngelFlow · May 19, 2007, 02:31 PM

lol Thats funny! Even though it wasn't much I liked it. Bird crap is actually why I fear birds over my head. But anyways, I liked the poem.^_^

Lotski · May 19, 2007, 10:13 PM

ahihih, nice one..
avoid short cutting terms,
its much better read..

although it made me smile..
ahehehe

!The White Wolf · May 19, 2007, 10:30 PM

How could this person possibly know what crap tastes like. Especially since it fell into his eye.

It'd be wise to think about these things in logical terms when writing. It'll make it better for you and for the reader.

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Forgotten soul Newbie Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 67 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 143	Birdie ( sorry again high on sugar ) Birdie, birdie, in the sky, why'd you do that in my eye? Looks like sugar, Tastes like sap, OMG! IT'S BIRDIE CRAP! __________________
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AngelFlow Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Home Posts: 141 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,076	Re: Birdie ( sorry again high on sugar ) lol Thats funny! Even though it wasn't much I liked it. Bird crap is actually why I fear birds over my head. But anyways, I liked the poem.^_^
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Lotski Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Baguio City, Philippines Posts: 150 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 358	Re: Birdie ( sorry again high on sugar ) ahihih, nice one.. avoid short cutting terms, its much better read.. although it made me smile.. ahehehe __________________ Be d REASON for someone's happiness, NOT just part of it... Be a PART of someone's sadness, but NOT d reason for it.
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!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: Birdie ( sorry again high on sugar ) How could this person possibly know what crap tastes like. Especially since it fell into his eye. It'd be wise to think about these things in logical terms when writing. It'll make it better for you and for the reader.
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