Thread: Birth of the Goddess

I don't think i've ever read a poem quite like this one.. it's different and yet ........ compelling... in my opinion anyway.. I liked this poem gren and i hope your write some more. ^-^

oh yes.. totally agree with you there... compelling... love the descriptions though

a very good poem there

"Locks of raven black
fall over eyes of amber fire,
and immaculate light pours
over and into
the newly born."

Is it Flocks?

Hmmm.... Nice, I like it a lot... It's something quite a lot different from what I've read- unike and that's such a good thing it this pale world ^^

The thing is that- even though the idea seems quite confusing to me, I kinda understood the poem, the mood, the rhythm and the words themselfe explained the peom and that is something quite great and shows that you are really good with this...

Anyways, enough of my bla bla, it's a nice work, I really enjoyed reading it and I hope I can read more...

P.s. Why can't Ray use that font color? O.o

Thanks all. I hold this one close, and glad that you liked it. I like to end on a powerful line, so I hope that my last line accomplished that.

Originally Posted by RayMe

"Locks of raven black
fall over eyes of amber fire,
and immaculate light pours
over and into
the newly born."

Is it Flocks?

No, "Locks" as in locks of hair. "Raven black" is a color description.