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    Black Dog

    Walking home one night
    I saw an awful shadow
    Walking home one night
    I stopped and stared in fright.

    There on the corner
    a dog with a grin
    there on the cormer
    A dog come for my sin.

    I knew who it was
    nothing less than grimm
    I knew what it wanted
    For me to know what it did.

    It fadded in the light
    and later on that night
    I looked out the window
    And I saw that awful shadow.

    It had a torn old ear
    and a croked left eye
    I battle scare remained
    And i wondered why?

    Why whould he come for me?
    In the prime of life?
    Why would he ask for me
    To give him my unworthy life?

    I walked out the door
    and rite up to him
    I looked at that awful grin
    and I just had to asked him:

    What do you come for?
    What do you want?
    I plead to you
    Not to take this life!

    He lost that awful grin
    He turned to me and sayed:

    It is time to return to the one within
    It is time to come back to the one with no sin
    don't make me cry
    I ask of you.
    Why can't I die?
    I envy you
    the one who must come
    I want to be the one with the sad end.

    With that he howled and others joined in
    With that he howled and I felt peace within.

    The soul was free
    The anguish releaved
    I feld myself drift away
    to a land that I would not leave.

    He walk beside me
    I walked beside him
    We walked together
    and I felt for him.

    Unable to die
    unable to live.

    I realize how he wanted
    to feel this peace within.

    We reached the end
    To another beggining
    We walked to the end
    To start a new life worth living.

    Godbye to you.
    the one I must say sorry to
    I might have given you a chance
    but you had to start anew.

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    Re: Black Dog

    i liked this poem and how you descibed the
    black talk at frist made me think you were going
    to die then you twisted it and became one with him
    on in the same if i undeerstod it right over all this pome
    is very cool your pretty good at this cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Black Dog

    I like how you had the reader thinking the dog was coming to attack you and as i read on i saw how you and the dog shair and exchange each others pain and walk to the land were both of you felt peace. The poem was a little relaxing to read. Hope to read the next one i enjoy reading your poems you should publish them when you have enough pages to make a big book id buy it

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    RAY!!!!!!! sombody likes it!!! yea!!! ok i am better...thanx you
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    ya nice one Lost_Love keep up the good work


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    Re: Black Dog

    Nice dark poem, it was nicely well written.

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    Re: Black Dog

    sweet poem, like how u included, the place with no sin. that was pretty cool.

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